Writings / Fiction: Chioma Iwunze-Ibiam

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Hopeville

Agbomma did not die, as I had expected, on a white-sheeted hospital bed. Instead, she died in the house on Hopeville where she had lived—first, with her blind mother, then alone, and finally, with me. The walls had cracks running up to the ceiling. When thunderstorms shook the foundation of the house, we shuddered and waited, expecting the roof to cave in. We sometimes talked about renting a nice duplex, with a large veranda and a larger field, but Nigerians are reluctant to move until there are death threats they can do little about.

“Relax. This house survived the civil war. It can survive anything else,” she told me. “And who knows what danger lurks in the new duplexes, anyway?” I joked.

My former football coach believed choking might be easy until he nearly choked on a handful of popcorn. Agbomma’s mother was a psychiatric nurse who expected to die from the bites and blows of her violent patients or from infections picked up by accidentally sitting on a contaminated needle, but she died of cancer in a herbalist’s shed. Agbomma’s father, on the other hand, had died of heartbreak because all four of his sons hadn’t returned from the war. I had once imagined a national burial after a heart failure from scoring a hat trick. But all I got out of five football seasons was a ruptured hamstring and later, a broken tooth in a camp fight.

Agbomma had many mornings of nose bleeds and migraines in Hopeville. She was recovering from a brain tumour surgery when I found her lying ungainly on the bathroom floor, a hand touching the edge of the mop brush. A large towel dangled from the taut rope which stretched from one end of the wall to the window. She had been trying to brush something off the ceiling and her legs slipped on the wet tiles. When I looked up, a large hairy cockroach scurried off into the crevice on the wall. Her haphazardly dyed ash and coal-black hair, which had been matted into Fulani cornrows, was damp. Her eyes were wide open, her lips hung agape, as though she was bewildered after having seen an enemy long-forgotten. Agbomma wore a piece of akwete wrapper she had sewn.

Retirement, she had learned, was responsible for the early deaths of pensioners, and so she had tried out catering, failed at it and then settled for sewing. I remember her saying, somewhat absentmindedly, that she was rediscovering herself. I hadn’t expected her to be such a good person. She took me to Mass when the weather was fine, and her heath, stable. Other times, she held my hand and prayed in the mornings and in the evenings. She greeted the neighbours, calling each one by name. But she never introduced me to them. I imagined it must have been embarrassing for her to say, “Meet my daughter, the lost daughter I didn’t claim after the riots.” But I could see in her eyes, a repentance so appealing that I didn’t dare be bitter towards her. She couldn’t help it. Like Moses’ sister, she had watched from a distance as my foster mother took me into her ash Mercedes and driven off to her mansion in Ogbor Hill.

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9 Responses to “Writings / Fiction: Chioma Iwunze-Ibiam”

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  1. Iquo Diana-Abasi says:

    Beautifully told tale. Love and loss can be difficult companions to court. I could feel her agony and emptiness all through the story.

  2. Obinna Udenwe says:

    The voice reminds me of Chika Unigwe’s Night Dancer – this story is simply written yet striking and thrilling. I love the narration and the way the dialogue is fused into it effortlessly such that the reader feels the story, like one feels a powdered face.
    This story tells tale of hope and family and most importantly of love – blind, longsuffering, patience and determined.

  3. Kenechukwu Uba says:

    There is love. It’s here in this story. So short and yet so full.

  4. paul pekin says:

    Very nice piece of writing. This is a writer with a bright future. I look forward to seeing more of her work.

  5. A beautifully told story that touches the heart strings. Love, loss, penance and sacrifice come to life without being smothered by sentimentality, Well done.

  6. Lovely story, Chioma. The voice is pure, the style stays clear of maudlin, which is a feat, given the subject here–and which makes it all the more poignant. I’m left with the sense of having lost something myself, too.

  7. Nze says:

    Thoroughly enjoyed this. Well done Chioma.

  8. Mira says:

    Beautiful. Loved the narrative style. Loved the attention to detail.

  9. Nnedinma says:

    Chioma this is amazing. I love the terseness of the piece. Well done!

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